The student develops coherent organization by giving each supporting reason its own body paragraph and by incorporating logical transition words to segue between paragraphs. The student quotes multiple sections of the passage to support each point, demonstrating a clear understanding of the material presented. The sentence structure is varied and effective, and the author maintains proper spelling and grammar throughout; overall, the response demonstrates a firm grasp of the English language. In addition, the length of the essay shows that the student was able to effectively manage the time provided.
Point 1, "using technology," is supported with the simple but relevant notion that technology allows us access to information and abilities to which we would not normally have access. Similarly, point 2, the "golden age," is supported by the basic description of our technologically saturated social condition. Though the overall development and organization of the essay does suffer from an occasional misdirection (see paragraph 3's abrupt progression from coffee pots to the benefits of technology to cars), the essay as a whole flows smoothly and logically from one idea to the next.